This scene introduces my ghost:
"It was so nice to get out of the cramped car. Freesia reached up to the sky, feeling the burn of a good stretch in her back muscles. Her butt had fallen asleep an hour earlier and it was nice to have feeling back there again.
“Okay, girls, I’ll get each of you a mini-paper bag filled with treats,” Granddad said. “Ready…set…go!”
Sage ran ahead into the store to score the choice candy. It was the same every year. The store owners only charged Granddad a buck for each of the girls to cram whatever they could fit into a tiny bag. It was cool earlier on but Freesia just wasn’t interested in a bag full of tooth rot anymore.
“Too old for this now, huh?” Granddad asked with a wink. “No worries. Just come on in and choose a little something.”
Freesia gave a weak smile then walked up the stairs to the store behind her grandparents. As she put her hand up to hold the screen door open, something caught her eye over on the right. Down the paved hill to Crescent Beach there was a girl—about her age—just standing there.
The girl was slight, her waist-length jet black hair surrounding her like a poncho. Her eyebrows curved perfectly around her almond-shaped eyes. She looked as though she spent a lot of time in the sun because her skin was a deep brown. And she looked like she’d stepped out of a magazine from the 1960’s with her retro jean cut-offs and funky “Peace and Love” tie-dyed t-shirt. Freesia wanted to look away but she couldn’t. That was until Gran yelled at her to shut the screen door, breaking her concentration.
"What are you doing, Freesy,” she said. “Shut that door now before every mosquito in West Hawk takes residence in here!”
“Okay, Gran, I…I’m coming, one sec,” Freesia said, turning back to the mystery girl but she’d already left.
A chill shot through Freesia’s body.
This was turning out to be one weird summer so far.
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8 comments:
I wonder who the girl is. Interesting sample. Will be looking for more of this one :)
Oh this has caught my attention and I want more. I wonder what is going to happen between the two girls.
Great introduction to the mysterious 60s-retro girl. You've piqued my curiosity about this unique and interesting ghost.
Hello guys! =)
Miriam, thank you. I'm so glad you liked it!
Sherry, I'm going to share more as I get deeper into it. ;)
Sandy, I see her so vividly in my mind so I'm glad I was able to get you to see her too.
Thanks so much for stopping by. See you next time!
Very mysterious. I like it.
Elaine Cantrell
I'd get chills, too. Very intriguing excerpt. Love the relationships here.
Sounds like Freesia is at that difficult age - too old to be a kid, too young to make a lot of her own decisions. And the introduction of the mystery girl makes an interesting cliffhanger. Thanks for sharing!
Elaine! That means so much coming from you. xo
Kay, thank you so much. I'm hoping this will be my next AP 'winner'!!
Patricia, you are very perceptive! ;) Thanks for coming by!
I'm going to be sharing more from this story so I hope to see you guys again!
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